There’s a big part of me that feels bad when I have write an article like this one. Here’s what happens: I come across something that a school or a school’s PTO puts out, I read it, and it’s just terrible. I know they didn’t intend it to be terrible, but for whatever reason, it is.
Since Top School Fundraisers is a teaching kind of blog, I think it would be helpful to others if we dissect what went wrong. Obviously, I delete the name of the school and try to make it as anonymous as possible. I’m not looking to be mean to anyone- this is just a learning opportunity for all of us.
Below is the latest example I’ve found of something NOT to do. It is a public thank you letter, published in a newspaper and online, that an elementary school carnival committee wrote to its community supporters. I have copied and pasted the entire article for you to read. Below the letter, I’ve listed a number of items that stand out to me as things you should avoid at all costs.
To the Editor:
We would like to take this opportunity to thank all of those businesses and individuals that helped with the XXX Elementary School Carnival. It was a wonderful and successful event because of the wonderful community we live in.
We would like to thank Noriyuki & Parker, Mountain Parks Electric, Town of XXX, R & J Liquor, XXX Rotary, XXX Fire Department, Gambles, Paul & Judy Shelter, Safeway, The Consignment Shop, The Candy Lady, Wendy Allison, XXX County Bowling Association, XXX County Auto Parts, Java Lava, XXX County Commissioners, and River Pines Joint Venture for the money they contributed. We would like to also thank the following for candy, children’s books, and pumpkins: Antique Store, Sun Piper, Paul & Judy Shelter, Shadow Mountain Chiropractic, Grand Beginnings, Francie de Vos, XXX Elementary Parents and Staff, Debbie Lorenz, Second Hand Grand, Edward Jones, Canyon Motel, Circle G, Alternative Elevations LLC, XXX Play Days and the Zook Family. We would also like to thank the XXX Medical Center for bags, Car Quest for the helium, Ace Country Hardware for all the stuff, XXX Play Days for running the cake walk and Andrea Verosky for sponsoring the event as XXX Elementary School. We would like to also thank the Fire Department, Greg Kuczkowski and John Weninger for the hands on help with the fire alarm during the event. This truly could not have happened without the help of the volunteers that ran the booths. We are grateful to all of you!
We apologize for the tardiness of this heartfelt tribute. Please remember next year is just around the corner and all we will need is time, money or candy to make the event even better. Let us know which you can do! Troop XXX would also like to take this opportunity to thanks Mountain Parks Electric for buying their Christmas Tree. The girls are planning a trip to Wyoming and they are off to a great start. Again what a wonderful community that would help us pull together such an event in not a quite month! You are awesome.
Ok, so what’s wrong with this letter? Here are three things I spotted right away. Please let me know if you find any more. continue reading
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